Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby kid a » Tue Jul 03, 2018 8:03 pm

Lyssa wrote:You've been writing overtime! :D I love how much of a fatty Paige has become, she's probably unrecognizable with her fat face and gigantic belly! :lol: Love how her cousins oinked at her :D , and Kelly was too nice but I'm happy she confronted Paige, she deserved to be told off! :D I'm guessing now that Paige is a big face mess, being a porky is very, very embarrassing for her at times. Shopping for clothes, family events, being the fat friend, and the guys she likes having no interest in her. ;)

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Overtime indeed. ;) will probably catch my breath for a few days but hopefully i have set the stage to close this out with authority.
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby leedy » Fri Jul 06, 2018 7:30 am

It seems like Paige is going to reach levels of gluttony and corpulence we didn't even see at Kelly's height during the beginning of the story. You know its bad when Paige's mom is starting to complain!
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby Lyssa » Fri Jul 06, 2018 9:18 pm

This is a really, really great story and you're a wonderful writer but I have one question, please don't take this as criticism I'm only confused about one thing and I hope you can please explain it. In the last chapter and in high school you wrote that Paige had a string of suitors. Wouldn't guys be turned off at Paige being so big and fat? Is she maybe involved with guys lower on the food chain who are taking advantage of a fat and stupid porker?

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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby kid a » Sat Jul 07, 2018 7:44 pm

Lyssa wrote:This is a really, really great story and you're a wonderful writer but I have one question, please don't take this as criticism I'm only confused about one thing and I hope you can please explain it. In the last chapter and in high school you wrote that Paige had a string of suitors. Wouldn't guys be turned off at Paige being so big and fat? Is she maybe involved with guys lower on the food chain who are taking advantage of a fat and stupid porker?

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Thanks very much. And i really don’t mind constructive criticism as long as it’s realistic. I.e. not “why isn’t the plot focusing on/covering specific things that I personally want it to”.

Even then I don’t mind those types of suggestions via PM, as many on here would attest.

Anyways, to answer your question, the “string of suitors” line was referencing the prior (Junior) year, not the present-time Senior year. I’ll have to look back and make sure I didn’t have a snafu but that was what I was talking about and hopefully makes more sense.

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- yeah; “previous fall” meant Junior year
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby Lyssa » Sat Jul 07, 2018 10:37 pm

Thank you for clearing this up! :D

I love how you made Paige lazy and whiny, her personality has changed with her body! :lol: Good stuff! I hope there's more of this.


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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby kid a » Mon Jul 09, 2018 6:27 am

Lyssa wrote:Thank you for clearing this up! :D

I love how you made Paige lazy and whiny, her personality has changed with her body! :lol: Good stuff! I hope there's more of this.


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No problem. And sorry (all) that I’ve left this hanging. Good news is that I’m very close to the grand finale - more this week for sure.
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby Talon Drone » Mon Jul 09, 2018 8:10 pm

the grand finale is eagerly anticipated. at the rate Paige is going, there’s no telling the highs (and lows) she’ll reach. After her rapid expansion in part 30, I can’t wait to find out how big she ends up, and the just desserts shes’s sure to receive.
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby kid a » Sat Jul 14, 2018 8:05 pm

Talon Drone wrote:the grand finale is eagerly anticipated. at the rate Paige is going, there’s no telling the highs (and lows) she’ll reach. After her rapid expansion in part 30, I can’t wait to find out how big she ends up, and the just desserts shes’s sure to receive.


Thanks ;)

Sorry again (all) for the delay. Probably repeating myself but I’m very close. Need to wait for the right window of free time to close this out; stay tuned.
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby Lyssa » Wed Jul 18, 2018 1:15 am

I guess Paige's must have some serious low self-esteem issues, I wonder how you're going to have her behave the next time she meets Mrs. Covington, Darla, and Kelly? :D Will she be whiny and passive? :lol:

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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby kid a » Thu Jul 19, 2018 10:43 am

Part 31

What is karma? Could it be possible that the universe “cares”...that the sinful and conceited amongst us are doomed to wind up on the receiving end of their own transgressions against others? With interest?

We may never know. However, call it what you may, Paige Forrester received a final, fattening dose of something as her Senior year of high school drew to a depressing close.

A steel grey SUV raced across the highway on a warm June morning, its turn signal blinking siren red as it exited and turned down the country road. Dark tinted windows concealed the interior from the view of passers-by as neared its destination, driving up a dusty, bumpy dirt road towards Camp Cupcake.

As it pulled into a parking space near the Admin building and the doors swung open, the appearance of exterior serenity was shattered instantly by frantic and whiny protestations from inside.

“How could you do this to me?!?!?!”, a young female voice wailed as the driver attempted to extract her from the vehicle.

“Oh my God, Paige,” she yelled in response. “Are you kidding me??? You did this to yourself.”

“I’m gonna say it one last time,” she continued gruffly. “You haul your fat ass out of this car right this instant or I’ll get someone to do it for you.”

“No,” came her smug reply. “You can’t make me.”

Her mother wiped the sweat from her brow and glared at her. “Fine, PAIGE. Have it your way.”

She whistled towards a couple of muscular young men near the building. “Hey guys!! Need some help over here.”

Paige peered out the door to see them purposefully walking in her direction with very unamused expressions on their faces. A few minutes, and some futile struggling later, her mother scored a resounding victory.

As they dragged her, facing backwards, towards the building, her massive and pillowy upper arms sagged over their toned and tan biceps like pale, quart sized bags of jello. “Jesus,” one of them exclaimed. “This is a big one. What the hell were you feeding her, Lady??”

“You want to answer that one hun??”, her Mom replied cheerily as she walked along side them.

Paige looked up at her in a state of complete exasperation. Her overloaded belly (fresh from a final morning of pigging out - her Mom’s “farewell gift”) poured out past her shorts and onto her pale, corpulent thighs; it jiggled wildly as the boys walked up the steps to the building, their gigantic catch in tow.

“Fuck you,” Paige spat furiously, her huge hips and ass brushing against the door frame as they crossed the threshold into the building.

Her Mom stared at her with blank resignation. “I barely know you anymore, Paige. But wow am I glad that I’m officially done dealing with your shit.”

Chills raced through Paige’s massive and exhausted body as her Mother delivered a parting shot.

“Have fun with Ms Covington, dear. I can only describe her reaction to the news that you’d be enrolling as a camper as unbound exuberance.”

“Oh and I almost forgot...she told me to say that Darla couldn’t WAIT to see you either.”
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