Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby Matt L. » Sat Jun 09, 2018 10:45 pm

Adept update, an all around enjoyable read.

I admire your brilliant use of words in describing the dumpy couch potato, the acne scars and chunky calves especially noteworthy, who’s throng of male suitors have abandoned her for the cheesecake variety she had once been. The sheer gluttony having affected her appearance, I wonder if Paige would develop a slovenly behavior to match.

The Camp Olympics I didn’t expect, an outstanding twist to your story, and I look forward to reading more about Kelly, Darla and Mrs. Covington.

Marvelous!

Cheers, Matt

BTW: Paige looking like the classical fat girl adds to the quality of your story.
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby Freaksss » Sun Jun 10, 2018 6:16 am

Awesome story. The progression is very well described.
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby kid a » Sun Jun 10, 2018 8:42 am

tfrmer wrote:You did an incredible job with this chapter and it's been well worth the wait. I think you're some kind of mastermind with how you've plotted it out so far and I can't wait to see what's in store as I never can pin down what direction you'll take it in next.


Thanks ;)

Funny, the “Camp Olympics” was never planned...and I’m surely making things more complicated for myself. lol

But i don’t get the sense that anyone is in a rush for this to be over so we’ll forge on. ;)
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby kid a » Sun Jun 10, 2018 8:48 am

Matt L. wrote:Adept update, an all around enjoyable read.

I admire your brilliant use of words in describing the dumpy couch potato, the acne scars and chunky calves especially noteworthy, who’s throng of male suitors have abandoned her for the cheesecake variety she had once been. The sheer gluttony having affected her appearance, I wonder if Paige would develop a slovenly behavior to match.

The Camp Olympics I didn’t expect, an outstanding twist to your story, and I look forward to reading more about Kelly, Darla and Mrs. Covington.

Marvelous!

Cheers, Matt

BTW: Paige looking like the classical fat girl adds to the quality of your story.


Ty sir - see my last post; the Olympics were a surprise to me as well. And I feel like Paige should be in the shot put, but what fun would that be ;)
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby kid a » Sun Jun 10, 2018 8:50 am

Freaksss wrote:Awesome story. The progression is very well described.


Thanks. I enjoyed that chapter...nice to take a break from the dialogue and focus on the carnage.
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby Lyssa » Sun Jun 10, 2018 9:40 am

Oh wow Paige is a big mess isn't she :lol: I'm thinking Paige might be feeling a little down and her emotions maybe make her eat more, I mean she probably is feeling some jealousy at Darla and maybe the other campers? :D Kelly isn't so much bigger than her at this point. :lol:
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby Matt L. » Sun Jun 10, 2018 11:18 pm

kid a wrote:
tfrmer wrote:You did an incredible job with this chapter and it's been well worth the wait. I think you're some kind of mastermind with how you've plotted it out so far and I can't wait to see what's in store as I never can pin down what direction you'll take it in next.


Thanks ;)

Funny, the “Camp Olympics” was never planned...and I’m surely making things more complicated for myself. lol

But i don’t get the sense that anyone is in a rush for this to be over so we’ll forge on. ;)



you are correct sir!
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby DELIMAN092262 » Wed Jun 13, 2018 12:29 pm

Another great part in a great story. I look forward to your description of the camp Olympics. The obvious being Paige experiencing a “wardrobe malfunction” where her sweatpants/shorts split under the strain. (Proving the African-American camper in part 7 was right. Paige has become a PAWG or Fat Ass White Girl.)

And, or Mrs. C could require that Paige must wear the “Shirt of Shame” from part 5 for a week.
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby leedy » Wed Jun 13, 2018 1:50 pm

Great addition Kid. Pretty interested to see Paige's attempt at the Olympics. Will the trio of Mrs.C, Darla and Kelly finally see give Paige a dose of her harsh reality or do they keep quiet, pamper her ego and somehow excuse her from participation.
Maybe there is a way to do both....
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Re: Fat Camp - by Kid A (XWG, Revenge)

Postby kid a » Fri Jun 15, 2018 5:55 pm

Thanks all ;) here’s the latest.
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