by blurmy » Sun Apr 29, 2018 2:37 pm
Excellent points bit.
As I pointed out to tcheser there were a lot of places where I felt the story would have benefited from being a little more in depth, something that was evident when tcheser added another 1,000 or so words to my draft.
What I try to do when writing a commission is tell a complete story while including everything the commissioner has asked for, sometimes it's just not possible to fit everything into a 3,000 word limit as I think is evident here.
When it comes to plot points well those are normally out of my hands. I'll often get an outline such as I want this to happen to this person and this, this and this to happen along the way. Its then my job to make an enjoyable read for my commissioner and hopefully to anyone else who takes a look.
I love getting constructive criticism as I can only get better from hearing it.
Thanks for reading and I hope you'll continue to check out my coming work.