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Re: Early Retirement (AP, WG)
by KyraBenoit » Sat Feb 10, 2018 4:09 pm
I really got into this segment. You do an outstanding job of putting the reader into the mind of the story's lead character. Many readers don't realize it, but that is often what makes the transformation come home in dynamic, powerful detail, and even erotic realization. The most powerful transformation stories I've ever read, like your Early Retirement, put the reader inside the transformed character, make the reader identify with her, and take the reader on the same adventure. Think of stories by Tang, Evil Dolly, Walsingham, and offerings like Road Trip from Varian Milagro , and the titillating novels by published authors like Emma Finn (e.g., Criminal Record) and Giulia Napoli (e.g., Eighteen Months). The way you pull the reader into the mind of the transformed character is among the best. Kudos to you!
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Re: Early Retirement (AP, WG)
by red_loves6 » Mon Feb 12, 2018 3:36 am
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Re: Early Retirement (AP, WG)
by red_loves6 » Mon Feb 26, 2018 5:54 pm
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Re: Early Retirement (AP, WG)
by pinkhippo99 » Tue Feb 27, 2018 6:34 am
This chapter was wonderful. I felt so much for Maggie!
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Re: Early Retirement (AP, WG)
by Islewing » Tue Feb 27, 2018 5:18 pm
You certainly out did yourself on this chapter. Bravo
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Re: Early Retirement (AP, WG)
by estranhosidade » Tue Feb 27, 2018 9:19 pm
Glad there's new chapter! •ᴗ• Thank you.
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Re: Early Retirement (AP, WG)
by red_loves6 » Wed Feb 28, 2018 12:10 pm
@pinkhippo - Thanks so much! I'm glad you're able to empathise with Maggie!
@Islewing - As always, greatly appreciated!
@estranhosidade - You're very welcome, glad you're enjoying the story!
@Islewing - As always, greatly appreciated!
@estranhosidade - You're very welcome, glad you're enjoying the story!
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Re: Early Retirement (AP, WG)
by Junketh71 » Sun Mar 04, 2018 6:03 pm
Very nice. Thank you for updating.
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Re: Early Retirement (AP, WG)
by Violet-C » Tue Apr 17, 2018 1:16 am
I adore this story, please do continue. The aging process has been so well covered that I’ve even been able to overcome the magic spell aspect at the beginning which I’m usually not a fan of.
I’m trying to write my own aging story that I hope to post soon.
Lots of Love
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I’m trying to write my own aging story that I hope to post soon.
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