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by Phoenix10 » Thu Dec 29, 2016 1:13 pm
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by Islewing » Thu Dec 29, 2016 3:05 pm
So far, great start. Will the focus be on John now? Looking forward to the next installment.
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by Moddie » Fri Dec 30, 2016 9:29 am
This is really well written. You have established the characters in a way that will make the inevitable transformation more meaningful. Very much looking forward to you continuing the story. I also really like how John wants to save his marriage but he is looking for a selfish solution that will change Melanie into the woman he wants. Generally a decent guy from what Melanie tells us but selfish in wanting what he wants instead of what is best for Melanie. Loving your beginning.
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by Phoenix10 » Sun Jan 01, 2017 9:52 am
Thanks for all the feedback! I'm working on the next installment - hopefully it'll be up in about a week.
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by Islewing » Sun Jan 01, 2017 5:21 pm
Nice. Can't wait.
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by Phoenix10 » Sat Jan 07, 2017 8:02 am
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by Moddie » Tue Jan 10, 2017 3:47 pm
I enjoy the fact that the protagonist has no idea what he is getting himself into. He still wants his marriage to work and his wish while thoughtful still seems to have the underpinning of a desire to see his wife just not be a lesbian any longer. This story has a tremendous amount of potential, especially if you avoid changing Melanie into a man. It will allow the characters to explore a lesbian relationship. Melanie teaching her husband everything he needs to know while enjoying the barmaid's gift. Great job so far. Looking forward to the next part.
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by Phoenix10 » Wed Jan 11, 2017 2:03 pm
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by Islewing » Wed Jan 11, 2017 6:58 pm
This is getting good. Keep it up.
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by funfun74 » Wed Jan 11, 2017 10:13 pm
agreed! Like were this is going.
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